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发表于 2007-11-17 11:14:17 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
<p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:192.75pt;mso-char-indent-count:16.0"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight:normal"><span style="font-size:10pt"><span style="mso-spacerun:yes"><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></span></span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight:normal"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">转</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight:normal"><span style="font-size:10pt"><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight:normal"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">学</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight:normal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt"> <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:192.75pt;mso-char-indent-count:16.0"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight:normal"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></b></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">这是从来没有过的事情,爸爸夺过他手中的插图版《聊斋志异》,用力扔到沙发上。事后他后悔没有在妈妈第一次喊他去洗澡的时候乖乖把书收起来,不过此时占据他整个心灵的是惊愕,眼光顺着书本跌落以后就不敢再回溯到他爸爸的脸上了。还没等他弄清楚自己到底做错了什么,爸爸的嗓门早已像机器通上电一样启动了,把他骂了一通。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他拾起书,走进卧室,出来的时候手上拿着干净的衣服,走进了浴室,一会儿就听到了莲蓬洒水的声音。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“苏城,吃饭了。”他听到妈妈的声音,赶快擦干身子穿上衣服走下楼去。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">吃晚餐的时候弟弟不停地对着他讲话,他只顾着吃饭。爸爸的脸色不至于那么难看,倒显得很疲惫,一吃完饭就上楼去,先是传来洒水的声音,然后当浴室的门被弄响的时候,苏城快速起身离开正在电视机前看动画片的弟弟跑到楼下的厨房,问妈妈是否需要帮忙洗碗。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“早先爸爸是不是批评了你?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“嗯。”他弄着手上的泡沫。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“他很少发火的。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我知道。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“他为什么骂你?”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我没听你的话去洗澡。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“这没什么大不了的。你有没有想过他为什么生气?”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“不知道。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“爸爸太忙了,脾气就会暴躁点,你不会生爸爸的气的,是不是?”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“不会的。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“行了,剩下的妈妈来洗就行了,你去陪弟弟玩吧。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他还不想上楼,闷闷地站在那里,拿着块抹布,擦着案台。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“妈妈,我今晚想一个人睡,行吗?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“为什么?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我想一个人睡。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“好吧,等弟弟睡着了我把他抱到我房里。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我上去了。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他摸着楼梯的扶手走上去,弟弟安静地看着电视,爸爸房间的门是关着的,他在沙发上坐了下来,喝了杯子里的水。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“哥,你快看啊。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“小声点,爸爸在睡觉呢。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">弟弟吐了吐舌头,不停地向苏城招手,苏城能从口型知道他在讲什么。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他站了起来,走去上厕所,回来的时候并没有在弟弟旁边停留,而是在路过的时候说了一句话:“我睡觉了。”然后,他把房门关上。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">打开空调,脱掉衣服,爬上床躺下,眼睛盯着天花板,仿佛那里有一盏亮着的灯。好一会,他在安静中居然能听到楼下厨房传来的水声,他知道妈妈在那里。他感到很舒服,很黑也很安静,便试着入睡。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他听到了音量很小的敲门声,先是把眼睛张开,又想忽略它,调整了睡觉的姿势,继续闭上眼睛。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">敲门声大了一点,还有弟弟压低嗓子的声音:“哥,快出来看啊。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏城很有把握他会安静下来。可过了几秒之后,弟弟的声音又穿过深绿色的房门传到他耳朵里:“哥,你在干什么?快出来看啊——”。尾音经过压抑,很不真实地消失在房间的黑暗中。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“哥,快开门啊,我要进去。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏城连身都不翻,把被单盖过眉头,嘴巴嗫嚅了一句:“真烦。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">突然他狠狠地抽缩了一下,就像在梦里一脚踏空。弟弟冷不妨地用力拍了一下门,大喊起来:“快开门啊,我要进去睡觉啦。”接着又是小巴掌接二连三落在房门上的声音。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏城快速掀开被单,几乎是同一时间他跳下了床,可是弟弟又安静下来了,他急忙停下走向房门的脚步。叹了口气,继续走了过去,手刚摸到门把手正要转开门锁的时候,门外弟弟哇的一声哭了起来。更让他感到不安的是他听到爸爸在教训弟弟的声音,他能想到爸爸如何把弟弟抱起来打他的屁股。他的手缩了回来,眼光要穿过木板安慰弟弟似地盯住房门,他光着身子,感到有点冷。他走到床前穿上短袖衫,不知如何是好地立在那里。窗外大半个月亮凉凉地悬着,他想快点结束暑假,可以投身到新的环境中去。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他几乎要把弟弟给忘了,外面安静下来。他知道妈妈走上楼来解救了弟弟,爸爸又关上了房门进去睡觉。外面的声音虽然由于房门的阻挡变淡了可依旧清晰,他不知如何是好。过了一会儿,弟弟的抽噎声消失了,电视的声音也消失了,灯暗了下来,门底端的光缩了回去,房子和客厅连成一片。他拿起床头柜的遥控器,把空调的温度调高,脱下短袖衫,爬上床。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">是妈妈叫他起来吃早餐的,轻轻敲了几下门,他就醒了过来。穿好衣服走到门前,手刚伸到昨晚停住的地方的时候停顿了一下,又很快地把门转开。开门的时候看见爸爸,一边喝水一边看茶几上的一沓资料。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“爸。”他站在门边叫他,好像准备要跟他讲什么。可是爸爸没有抬头看他,说:“快去刷牙洗脸,等着你吃早餐呢。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他走向浴室。这时原先被他挡住的晨光穿过睡房的门摊在客厅的地板上,反光刚好落在爸爸的脸上,使他一下子抬起头来,眼光顺便跟着苏城游了过去。他喝完最后一口水,站了起来,使劲伸了个懒腰。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“动作快点。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“嗯。”他含着满口亮闪闪的泡沫答应了一声。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">走到楼梯口的时候,他听到楼下弟弟的笑声,接着是爸爸的声音:“笃笃笃笃笃,昨晚有人被打屁股了。”他的嘴唇舒展了一下。走下去,见到爸爸用手指在挠大腿上的小生物,弟弟笑着缩成一团。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“哥哥下来了,吃饭吧。”妈妈以经把早餐准备好了。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">房子外面的阳光像是被稀释的糖水,他看到一只鸟儿飞了过去。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">爸爸很快吃完早餐,弟弟跑到门外跟他说再见,苏城将牛奶含在嘴里,看着汽车驶过拐角处。他突然快速地把牛奶咽了下去,跑出去骑着单车走了。身后弟弟长长地喊了一声:“哥——”接着被妈妈拉进屋里。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">大半个暑假过去了,还有二十一天,他就要被送到离家很远的寄宿学校。他知道这已经没有商量的余地。妈妈帮他恳求爸爸让他在原来的学校念完初中,爸爸口气很决绝地说:“再念一年,升不上好高中就毁了。”他嘴巴紧闭着,看着父亲严肃的表情,一会儿就觉得非常乏味,径自走进房间里。弟弟抱着爸爸的膝盖,说:“我也要和阿城一起上学。”爸爸拍着他的脸蛋说:“小家伙,你还太小呢。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">妈妈走进房间,一只手放在苏城的肩膀上,宽慰道:“爸爸这是为了你好,爸爸周末一有空就去接你回来。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我知道。”他靠坐着墙壁看书,眼光没有离开他手中的《聊斋志异》,从窗外进来的阳光落在书页上,反光很强。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">弟弟跑了进来抱住苏城的腿问:“妈妈,我要什么时候才能和哥哥在一起上学呢?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“要过多十年呢。”妈妈笑了。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他把脑袋转向苏城,说:“哥哥,到时候我们就可以一起上学了。”他靠得很近,嘴唇几乎要碰到苏城的脸。苏城觉得脸上痒痒的。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">而仅剩的二十一天也被他手上的书打发过去了。到了行李收拾好放进车尾箱的时候,他预感自己会晕车,闭着嘴巴一句话也不说。车开走了,玻璃隔阻着视线,可他也只向后面望了一会儿,看到草丛里一只渴睡的猫蜷成一团。车最终开上公路,加快了速度。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">要不是弟弟一路上叽叽喳喳地对车外的风景发问,在去学校的这段路上倒可以闭上眼睛再睡上一觉。他的视线停留在前面开车的爸爸的脑勺上,像要看穿里面的组织结构。弟弟发疯似地趴在他身上问他看到的一切,像只果蝇。把他弄烦的时候他就用膝盖把弟弟支开,不多一会儿,他又嘤嘤嗡嗡起来。他一路上没说上几句话。唯一引起他兴趣的,是一只大母鸡扑腾着翅膀躲过车的撞击,他甚至扭头一直看到看不清为止,眼泪都快流出来,母鸡咯咯叫了几声,啄草丛的蚱蜢去了。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他到达的这所学校并不比原先的学校漂亮,但这里的人很会念书,学习的节奏很快。爸爸希望他在这里改掉拖拖拉拉的毛病,把无关紧要的书本收进储物柜里。汽车在学校门口停住,他最后一个下来。妈妈又一次把之前叮嘱过他的话说上一遍,末了对爸爸说道:“我就是不放心这孩子呀。”手顺着苏城的头发滑落,放到了他的肩膀上。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">弟弟一个劲地往前跑,绕了个弯又从后面跑回来,兴奋地猛拉苏城的手说:“哥哥哥哥,那边有人在打球。”苏城望了过去,篮板被一棵大树完完整整地遮挡住了,只能看到支撑着它的圆形柱子,刷上了石灰,很干净。走了几步,整个篮板连同那根白色的柱子都一览无遗,几个年龄相仿的男生在那里玩着,看上去很脏。他空咽了一下。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">爸爸他们帮苏城把之前剩下的手续办理完之后就走了,他一个人坐在传达室里,等待班主任过来领他。打电话的是一个老头,看上去很慈祥,脖子曾经有个口子,可能以前动过手术。他问苏城是否要喝水,跟他说厕所就在走廊的尽头,苏城摇着头。想问他关于手术的事情。他一时不知道如何开口,所以继续沉默着,直到老师过来把他领走。临走时他跟老头打了声招呼。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">老师帮他提一袋行李,带他向学生宿舍楼走去。他的目光经过花坛、草坪、建筑物的墙壁、停放着单车的棚架、阳光耀眼的自动喷洒器、教学楼的顶层,最后停留在一栋宿舍楼斑驳的大门上。“走啊。”老师微微把头撇向大门,唤上他一句。苏城这才把目光从门上拔了出来,跟着走过去。经过大门的时候他用空闲着的那只手撕下一块朱屑,在指尖揉成粉末,掉到地上去了。他的目光好一会儿在注视着那些正在掉落的朱屑,等到他们爬到三楼,老师说“就在尽头哪间”时,他才把手往裤子上拍打,看向前方。上午的阳光擦过前面一栋宿舍楼的背脊倾泻在走廊尽头,整个三楼就那一角显得特别明亮。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">门是关着的。老师敲了几下后把门推开,阳光从他们身后跑了进去,宿舍也变明亮了,一个高大的男生用短袖衫挡住胸膛,咦——地叫了一声缩紧双肩,引得其它两个人<personname productid="和" wst="on"></personname>和<personname></personname>老师哈哈大笑。紧接着他说:“老师进来也不敲门。”随后又不慌不忙地把短袖衫套过头部,穿上了。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我敲了,你没听见。”老师说,“这是你们的新室友,互相照顾啊。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">那个高大的男生把手伸过来,说:“我叫刘大海,你叫什么名字?”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"> <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏城跟他握了手,感到他手掌的厚实,正想说出自己名字的时候,看起来最小的那个男生抢先一步说:“我们叫他刘大个,他叫苏满,我是苏维秦。”他看上去很兴奋,把另外一个男生的名字也给报上了。接着他的话,刘大海补充一句:“小儿多动症维秦。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏维秦跳蚤般地跳了过来,问:“你几岁?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏城说:“我叫苏城,十五岁。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏维秦高兴地喊道:“终于有人比我还小了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">坐在一边一直不讲话的苏满说:“他看上去比你大很多。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏维秦跳了过去,给他肩膀一拳。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">老师说她还有事要做,叫他们帮苏城把床铺整理好,走了出去,并没有把门关上。苏城再次看到那片阳光,一小口气通过他齿间从微张的唇间流出来,他抿了一下。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">刘大海说:“一起去打球吧,今天天气很好。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏城说:“我不会。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏维秦也怂恿他,他摇了摇头。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“你们去玩吧,我自己弄就行了。”苏城见他们都要过来帮忙收拾,说了一句。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“那我们先走了,你等会儿也过来玩啊。”刘大海说完就把手臂一只搭在苏满肩上一只搭在苏维秦头上,和他们往外走。苏维秦扭过头说了一句:“要来啊。”用力跳过房门,跑掉了,其它两个追了上去。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏城开始收拾他的床铺,从铁架梯子爬上去擦床板。由于临近的两张床是连在一起的(中间只隔一架短梯),他擦床板的时候另一张床也会咿哑微微晃动,他看过去,一床乱糟糟的被单,枕头上有污渍(口水和蚊血)。擦完床板后他开始收拾床板下面的书桌,把自己带来的书放在架子上,书脊朝外。他看着那本《聊斋志异》有几秒之久,接着把剩下的东西都弄好了,就跑到走廊,向球场望去。看不到什么。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他走了回来,在自己的椅子上坐下,看到他们的桌子上都放着课本和练习册,伸手够到了离自己最近的一本,打开,看到扉页写着“苏满,初三(</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">3</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">)班”。信手翻了翻,大部份是空白的。他把书放下,走到卫生间撒了泡尿,又走回来,坐在椅子上,好像把什么丢了又想不起来,最后取下《聊斋》,接着上次的内容看下去,一直看到吃午饭的时候。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">吃午饭的时候是一个人,饭堂很吵,他很快就走了出来,在校园里走着。正午的太阳很大,他走到操场,那里没人,绕过大树走了回来,穿过宿舍大门,爬上楼梯,到了三楼,突然停住了脚步。宿舍里传来他们的声音。最后他还是走了过去,门没关,三个男生光着上身坐在风扇前。他眉头难以察觉地皱了一下,闻到一股汗的味道。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“刚才上来叫你一起吃饭,你不在。”苏维秦见到他就说。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我吃过了,到下面走走。”他绕过他们走进卫生间,出来的时候把手在衣服上擦干,爬上床,说:“我睡觉了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他说了,他们没听到。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他一觉睡到天快黑了,室友们发出的声音把他吵醒。他坐起身来,看到刘大海手里抱着个篮球,他们的衣服比上午又脏了许多。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“你还没吃饭哪?”苏维秦问,他双手攀在苏城的床沿上荡了起来,连在一起的两张床呀呀地响着。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“刚刚睡醒。”他没有靠着墙。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“怕现在饭堂已经没东西吃了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“哦。”他下了床。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">苏维秦看到刘大海在收衣服,连忙说:“我先洗我先洗。”同时双手松开跳了下来。苏城也走到阳台,放水洗脸。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">睡了整个下午却像睡眠不足的人,把毛巾敷在脸上双手捧住好一会儿,等到水被吸进鼻腔时才把它拿下来,显得像个哭过的人。它把毛巾挂好,微低着头说:“我出去了。”然后就往外走去。浴室里突然冒出苏维秦的声音:“等会儿,我带你去找吃的。”显然他没听到。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">饭堂里已经没热的东西吃了,小卖部里几个人边喝汽水边看电视。他走了过去,要了面包和牛奶就走了出来,走到操场的双杠上,跳坐上去,双脚在半空荡着,好一会儿他看着远远近近稀疏的人。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他快速把最后一口牛奶咽下去,跳了下来,向传达室跑去。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我能打一下电话吗?”他喘着气问道。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">老头看向他,说:“可以,但要快。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他拨了家里的号码,等了很久才有人接听。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“妈。”他只说了一个字就干巴巴地站着了。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“习惯吗?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“有一个室友跟阿弟一样,话很多呢。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“呵呵,你可不能这么说人家。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我知道。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“想不想跟你爸爸说说话?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我想跟你说话。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“吃午饭的时候阿通过来了,他以为你是下午走的,他给你带了礼物,要等周末你才能看到了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“阿通。”他打了个激灵,一口气堵住了胸口。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“是啊,大概是学习用品之类的东西吧,我没拆开。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“不要让阿弟拿走。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“妈妈帮你收好了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“妈,叫阿弟过来。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他听到妈妈喊弟弟的声音和弟弟应和的声音。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“哥,你洗澡了没?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“还没有。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“吃饭了吗?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“吃了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“啊通给你的东西能给我吗?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“不可以。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“小气鬼。我不跟你说话了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“这小鬼。”是妈妈的声音,“放心吧,妈妈会帮你收好的。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">弟弟又跑了过来,说:“哥,爸爸说也要送我去你那里读书。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“你的动画片呢,不看了?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“一个人不好看。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“那等我回去就和你一起看好不好。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“好。我去看动画片了,拜拜。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">弟弟把电话挂断了,听筒里传来一阵忙音。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他走出传达室,又向双杠走去,他看到篮球架下还有人在打球,其中一个人还不停地往地上吐口水,天相当黑了。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他空咽了一下,长长的气从鼻腔里呼了出来。就在爸爸向他发脾气的第二天早上,他和阿通在公园里骑着单车比赛速度,就在他收拾好行李上车的时候,他向后望,看到一只慵懒的大猫。</span></p>
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<p>这篇的气息还可以,只是对话似乎还是柔了点。</p>
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<p>好,同样写青春,这篇却是近期同类的鳌头,亲情、友情,少年莫名骚动中的不安,用平静的笔触写来,不波不澜,却十分耐看。</p><p>你能这样安静的写字,真[em17]</p><p></p><p></p>
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我的基本工作是:上笼屉、铺麴、点火、取浆、入缸,最后起糟。
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<p>你不会生爸爸的气的,是不是?</p><p>真翻译腔</p><p>真海明威……</p>
这就像花儿一样。
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发表于 2007-11-17 14:20:26 |只看该作者
<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>taxing</i>在2007-11-17 13:45:41的发言:</b><br /><p>你不会生爸爸的气的,是不是?</p><p>真翻译腔</p><p>真海明威……</p></div><p></p><p><font face="宋体">“你不会生爸爸的气的,是不是?”</font></p><p><font face="宋体">我引的居然也是这一句。</font></p><p><font face="宋体">这篇整体还不错。<span lang="EN-US" style="mso-fareast-language:zh-tw"></span></font></p>
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发表于 2007-11-17 19:48:55 |只看该作者
<p>“苏城再次看到那片阳光,一小口气通过他齿间从微张的唇间流出来,他抿了一下。”</p><p>这句感觉很妙,读到的时候也仿佛有一口气凝在那里,结尾处的两个呼应又慢慢把这口气放了出来。</p>
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发表于 2007-11-18 19:06:14 |只看该作者
<p>因为你大部分都在描述、甚至是白描,所以有些细节还要好好揣摩,以获得更现场的真实。你好的地方也恰恰是这一点:能很敏感地捕捉一些不经意的细节,比如不有引用的那句。</p><p>还有,写少年、童年,整个小说里不仅对白,还有叙述里的用词用句,都要让读者不易察觉地浸润在那个年龄普遍特征里(但这并不意味着削减人物的特点、个性),有些词还是太跳。比如“心灵”等等。包括细节发展、感受的节奏,有时也突然太快。写的现场,要多感悟、把握。要没有痕迹,但又很真实、贴切。</p>
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