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发表于 2007-8-25 16:10:51 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
<p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">秘密</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">/</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">杨葱</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">若干年来第一次在</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">msn</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">上打开和阿北的对话窗。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">当时我正要写一部估计永远也写不完的书。是个少儿出版社的约稿,五十篇校园小小说合集,我稀里糊涂地答应下来,签了合同就抛在脑后,结果原本半年的约期被有</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">Deadline</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">强迫症的我一直拖到只剩小半个夏天。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">赶紧回家找小时候的东西。翻箱倒柜折腾了半天,找到影集一册,贺年片一大包,虎头蛇尾的日记若干本,其中一本还扣着忘了密码的密码锁。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我爸看着满屋狼藉抱怨:“你不是特能编吗?还要看这些?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“不是那么简单的。”我正捣鼓密码锁,心想实在不行只能给锯断。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">怎么跟我爸说呢,写故事最好玩的地方还不是编,得真有那么一件事,一个瞬间,一幅画面,一个人……你想从心里拿出来,摆在日光下,讲给别人听,可是不能直接说出来,要在上面修修剪剪,改装变形,包裹再包裹,掩盖再掩盖,……最后,你似乎把这事说了,可是又什么也没说,它藏在故事里变成了一个秘密,等待被人猜出来。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我想写的是藏着秘密的故事。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">如今才发现小时候作一个好孩子好学生有多无聊!等我把自己能想到可以拿来写写的素材一一列举,</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">50</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">的数目还差得远呢,没办法我开始骚扰</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">msn</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">上的同龄好友,一个个逼问过去,给我讲讲你小学中学时的故事吧!校园里好玩的人,有趣的事,无论如何忘不了的!</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">就这样在某天下午顺手打开了阿北的对话窗。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">阿北是我的中学同学,他原本不在我的故事里,一个不喜欢也不讨厌的人,是记忆的淘汰机制最先模糊掉的影子人物,若不是几年前他加了我的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">msn</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">,我和他,应该不会在这个世界上再有任何瓜葛吧。</span><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">阿北的回话很快过来:“我没有什么值得写的故事,不过我倒认识一个好玩的人。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“说说!”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“是我小学同学,一个胖乎乎的高个。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“有一阵他脸上长痘痘,他妈老要给他挤,他就是不让,他妈坚持,他就说一个五毛,他妈说五毛就五毛,然后赚了两块钱和我一起打游戏……”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我对着显示屏狂笑,我说阿北你要是不忙就好好给我讲讲他的事,有多少听多少。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“还是那年夏天,我们去打红白机,一块钱一个小时,他又没钱了,也没痘痘可挤,就骗家里说去洗澡,拿到一块钱。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我们打完了游戏,路过我家,他问我,你家有水管么?我说废话当然有,我把他领到我家,他在水龙头底下把脑袋冲湿了。然后就回家去了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我发过去一个企鹅咧着大嘴狂笑倒地的表情。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“如果你喜欢,还有很多,不过我要下班了。明天再聊!”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">没等我回应,阿北的小绿人灰掉了。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">其实这个人的故事不是我需要,或者说不是编辑需要的那种。可我还是想听,我的生活里没有这样的人,他像是我喜欢的那些电影小说里的人物,扔在人堆里绝没有人多看一眼的相貌,高个儿,背却永远直不起来似的,走路擦地,比较壮,但还不至于是个胖子。眼睛不大,不爱和人对视,坏笑的时候也许心里正难过,表情难过的时候心理坏笑着,很聪明,但是成绩不好。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“他挺聪明的其实,但不爱学习,成绩一塌糊涂,我们在一起就是玩儿,除了玩儿还是玩儿。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">第二天一上线,我看到阿北的留言。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">给他发了个闪屏震动。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“好,继续讲。还有一次,他让我和他一起四处搜集别人扔的电线,然后拿到楼顶烧,烧了整整一下午,夏天,人都热成了屎,最后烧出一个铜疙瘩,拿去卖了两块钱,接着去打游戏。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“人都热成了屎。”我重复。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“嗯,没错。我记得我们后来有点中暑了,晕晕乎乎地开始说梦话。他指着云彩说:那些棉口袋里头装的都是雪,如果能够得着,把口袋撕了,咱们就能凉快了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“诗人呀……他家里干什么的?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“他家是知青,他爸是个作家,没名的那种。和他妈离婚了,娶了一个当地人以后搬走了。他还有个姐姐。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“他不爱让我去他家,不过有一次,他告诉我去他家玩儿,我说玩什么呢?他说可以潜水。然后掏出来一个潜水镜。我就颠颠儿地跟他去了。结果他说你等着,然后从厨房——他们家厨房是一个平房,家是另外一个,中间是院子——然后我一看他把他家的水缸挪啊挪的挪出来了。据说是有点漏了,他妈准备让他扔呢。然后灌满了水,把衣服脱得只剩内裤,自己戴个眼镜进去了,过了好一会儿冒出来,把眼镜给我,说,该你了……</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“水缸漏的水把我们放在地上的衣服都弄湿了,为了等衣服干,我在他们家呆到挺晚,后来停电,我们就在院子里唱歌,他姐姐喜欢小虎队,就唱青苹果乐园午夜时分别徘徊,唱着唱着他突然停了下来在黑暗里问我:</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">I love you</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我知道不过冬秋</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">no</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">是啥意思?唱完小虎队,他独唱无地自容,唱完说他他以后要做摇滚乐队的鼓手。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“后来?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“明天再说,我有点事得走了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">关上电脑才意识到,我都没问问阿北现在在做什么。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">即使翻遍了所有那些陈年旧物,和阿北有关的只有班级的集体照和三张贺年卡。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">贺年卡一年一张,最普通的那种,里面的祝词除了落款的时间不同别的一模一样。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">洋葱:祝你新年快乐。阿北</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">接下来是个周末,阿北在和我约好的时间准时上线。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“阿北,都忘了问你,你现在做什么呢?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“干活挣钱呗。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我没再多问。接着听阿北讲“他”的故事。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“他有个毛病,很坏很坏的毛病,他特爱说一句话,‘哎,你知道么,’然后是‘某某死了。’这某某一般都是有几天忽然不来学校的人,或者我们都认识的出差的邻居。他会像模像样地编各种或离奇或正常的死法。即使我习惯了,知道他在骗人,还是经常会被吓一跳。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“阿北我喜欢上他了。”我突然忍不住地说。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“你还是先听我讲完吧。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“他喜欢我们班上一个女生,他喜欢人的方式也特奇怪,见到真人就远远跑开,一句话也不说,但是在底下说人家的坏话。比如她写作文好那都是抄的,她穿衣服太难看,她的牙白因为是假的,辗转传到那女生耳朵里,女孩子给气得趴在桌上哭,他在这边乐。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“后来这女生有三天没来上学,他老毛病又犯了,和我说,‘哎,阿北你知道吗,某某死了,被水草缠住淹死的。我瞪了他一眼没理他。结果,几天后,我们知道这女生真的是游泳出事了,死了。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">是老师在课堂上告诉我们的,我当时回头看了他一眼,他的表情我一辈子都忘不了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“后来呢?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“后来他就老实了,再也没开过这种玩笑,也不贪玩了,学习越来越好,总之变得很正常。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“再后来?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“再后来初中我们全家搬到北京。就和他拜拜了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“那你们现在还有联系吗?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“偶尔。他还真做了一段时间的摇滚鼓手,现在在倒腾买卖。也在北京。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我想见见他。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“真的吗?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“真的。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“你会失望的。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“……”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“好吧,给你他电话。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">晚上,我拨通了阿北给我的号码。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">听上去怎么都是一个胖子的声音。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“我是阿北的中学同学,现在正写点东西,他和我讲过你的故事,我想见个面,和你当面聊聊行吗?”我像背课文一样紧张得不行。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“啊?我能有什么故事啊?”对方难听的笑声让我一下子沮丧到谷底。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“就是你小时候的事儿,和阿北一起烧电线,玩潜水之类的。”我仍抱着一丝希望。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“哈哈,这些也算事儿?都是阿北的主意,我就是跟着他,瞎闹呗。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“那游泳淹死了的女同学,你还记得吗?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“什么?谁死了?我们班同学都健在。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“那挤青春痘换钱呢,是不是真的?还有你爸你妈是不是离婚了?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">“放屁!胡说!那是他爸他妈!”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我愣在那里不知道说什么好,很多事情,即使你做了一千种假设,实际发生的总是第一千零一种。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">第二天没在</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">MSN</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">上见到阿北。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">第三天也没。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我又打通胖子的电话,问他要阿北的电话号码。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">他这次倒是心平气和,说阿北当摇滚鼓手的时候他们还有联系,后来阿北做买卖去了,两个人也不再联系,他的手机也变了,新的没有。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">阿北是个怪人。胖子说。从小就很怪。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我说完谢谢准备挂断电话。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">对了,你是不是就是杨葱啊?胖子忽然问。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">是啊,怎么了?</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我当然不怎么。你应该去问问阿北。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">问阿北……可是阿北在哪里?</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">初三的集体照上,阿北在最后一排男生里木呆呆地站着,太过刺眼的阳光让每个人的五官都曝光过度,我无论如何也看不清他的长相。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">阿北送我的贺年卡过了这么多年还散发着好闻又廉价的香味——那会儿的贺年卡都是这个味儿。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">打开来,他把我的名字故意写成了洋葱,嗯,那会儿同学们都这么写。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">我继续研究,他的字有点往左歪,连成行后又一块儿往右上斜,我想象着他写字的样子,可是想象不出。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">阿北,我从来不认识阿北。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">但他给我讲了个故事,里面藏着他的秘密。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span lang="EN-US"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p>
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<p>这篇不是村上春树</p><p>等评…………</p>
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<p>在我看来,一个吸引人的故事,情节可以不复杂,但得有一个超过90度的大转折,千万别让我猜出来;人物不用多,多了也记不住;篇幅不能长,没耐心看;语言要干脆利落,一句是一句,就算写情感类的也得有事不关己的冷静,最痛恨抹了蜜糖似的或故作阴暗病孩子之类的东西。嗯,你还是挺会讲故事的,两篇故事,上次那篇也是,我都痛快地看完了。假如你以讲好玩的故事为创作的终极目标,那么不妨这么走下去。</p><p>这篇的结尾差一点,不用挑这么明,泄气了。标题也不够有新意。</p>
我看出来了,兄弟们个个身怀绝技啊……
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<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>冯与蓝</i>在2007-08-28 16:09:30的发言:</b><br /><p>在我看来,一个吸引人的故事,情节可以不复杂,但得有一个超过90度的大转折,千万别让我猜出来;人物不用多,多了也记不住;篇幅不能长,没耐心看;语言要干脆利落,一句是一句,就算写情感类的也得有事不关己的冷静,......</p></div><p>真是这回事。</p>
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真是这回事
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<p>谢谢冯与蓝!两篇都说得我心服口服。</p><p>的确在乎故事性,希望能冷静,不动声色煽情……似乎都是本能,终极目标之类倒没想过……姑且自娱自乐兼娱人。</p><p>剩下的回去消化。<br /></p><p></p>
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