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聂泽泽

<span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">1</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">你偷过你吗钱吗</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">你偷过你妈钱吗？</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">偷过。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">为什么偷的？</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">玩游戏，电子游戏。当时陕坝最大的游戏厅是万达，卖两种币，黄币五毛，白币一块。我最爱玩的《铁拳》需要一个黄币，而一个巨大的坦克游戏需要两个白币，我没玩过。《铁拳》我一个币能打六七个人，当时盛行的《拳皇》我只能打三四个人。我《拳皇》的水平常常被人嘲笑，因此我很少玩《拳皇》，而是躲在角落里一个人静静地搓《铁拳》。《铁拳》是当时仅有的</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">3d</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">格斗游戏，比起浮华的《拳皇》来说，《铁拳》更需要的是一招一式的真才实学，也正因为如此，《铁拳》没有获得多少生存空间，渐渐淡出了历史舞台，现在只存在于</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">S</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">的光盘中。我玩的时候，发现有个人常常站在旁边看，一次我快死的时候，他终于投了一个币，救了我，然后他又输给了我，然后他看了看我，伸过手来，告诉我他叫平伟。后来我们就经常结伴出入于多家游戏厅，并被许多游戏厅老板误认为是亲兄弟。虽然我对《铁拳》里的每个人物都很精通，但是我从来没用一个币通过关。为此，我们常到</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">S</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">游戏厅演练，熟悉各种人物的各种套路，出拳时机，躲避技巧。我们最常去的是实验小学旁边的一家</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">S</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">游戏厅，是实验小学的魏老师开的，是个老头。去年我回去，再次和平伟踏入这家</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">PS</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">游戏厅，发现游戏厅除了多了几台</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">PS2</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">以外，十几年来竟然没有发生任何变化，周围还是像我当年一样大的小孩，魏老师还是个老头，仍然认得我们，见我们进来，他说，《铁拳》的盘子已经坏了。《铁拳》我最喜爱的角色是那个拿剑的铁人，我至今都不知道他的官方名字，每次我选他的时候，平伟就说，又选那个人啊。后来我们就叫他“那个人”。平伟爱玩的是一个大众角色“黄毛”，也叫“铁拳”，因为他有一招超重拳，操作简单，←＋</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">AB</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">，一拳打出去就能废对方多半管血，这超重拳无法阻挡，但也只有菜鸟才用这招，因为这招动作极慢，得半秒多才能打出去。我和万达老板对的时候，就是都用的“黄毛”，我们是对小重拳，就是下半圈加轻拳，←↓→＋</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">A</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">，当时我已经有点紧张了，因为我已经赢了万达老板五把了，这台机子周围也已经围了一圈人，众所周知，万达老板可是《铁拳》高手。我们就是一晃一晃地诱对方出拳，只要先出拳的那个人被对方挡住了，那么接下来</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">80</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">％他就要挨拳了。万达老板就是在每次诱我出拳的晃动中被我一拳打到，他的动作太慢了。在大约第十把的时候，我实在有些不好意思了，就使了一次超重拳，输了比赛。当时的游戏厅还很纯洁，没有赌博和带彩的游戏，也正因为如此，游戏才成了年轻人赢得荣誉的战场。那次以后，我名声大噪，不管玩什么游戏背后都有许多人围观。平伟也选“那个人”，原因是“那个人”有一个其他人都没有的绝招，平伟屡试不爽，那绝招就是自杀，每次平伟成功的将剑从自己肚子上穿过去的时候，平伟就哈哈大笑，比通关都快乐。其实当时我们玩过的游戏还很多，但我们玩游戏的动机很纯，可不是为了在同学面前炫耀，所以我就不一一列举了。我们是轮换着请客，也就是，轮换着从家里偷钱，这次是他，下次就是我，没有一次打破过这种默契。游戏给小小年纪的我们带来的激情与空虚，偷钱带来的恐惧与歉疚，都能让我们进行第一次思考和感怀。每次从游戏厅出来，我望着橘黄色的路灯，就想着，我这辈子是完了。平伟也是慌慌张张，但从游戏厅出来后，我们一般都只讨论一下当天的战况，得失，以及心得体会什么的，从不交流我们的迷茫，我们大概都以为这迷茫是自己所独有的。我们就这样逛遍了陕坝的各种游戏厅，并被各种比我们大的孩子退过钱。我第一次被别人退就是在万达，是阿毛退的我的钱，阿毛死于几年前的一次斗殴。到我初三时，网吧大规模入驻小镇，万达倒闭了，</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">PS</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">游戏厅转入了地下，越来越少，我一上高中，一个时代就过去了，我们都落伍了。最开始，小学二三年级的时候，我是从早点钱里攒玩游戏的钱，常常为了一天的游戏饿一星期肚子。后来钱渐渐不够用了，我就开始拿妈妈的钱，我还卖过家里的一些能被当作废铁的东西，包括一个车轮一只铁锤和一把斧子。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">你妈知道吗？</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">知道。每次玩的时候，她都站在我后面。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /><br />2</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">寒假</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　初二的寒假很漫长，因为我家没有有线电视。有有线电视的平伟家，整天开着电视，维护着他家的安宁祥和，我家没有有线电视，所以爸爸整天出去喝酒，妈妈整天打麻将，我整天无所事事，等着偷上妈妈的钱去玩游戏，好躲避醉酒回来的爸爸和妈妈的争吵，他们可能以为吵架就能减轻贫困带来的艰难。有一天，我决定为这个家庭负责，于是，我决定偷有线电视。有线电视线从我家屋顶过，离我家无线天线大约两米远。以我当时的物理水平，我认为，只要用一根铜丝把两者连起来，就可大功告成。我从我的百宝箱里找出一根电线，抽出一根头发一样的铜丝，从隔壁孙大海家借来梯子，我告诉他，我的足球掉到房顶上了，他还不知道我是用梯子来偷他家的有线电视。孙大海很不乐意地把梯子借给了我，并且用手势警告我，如果足球掉到他的院子里，可就别想再要回来了，他的院子是用来放垃圾的，神圣不可侵犯。我点头哈腰表示同意。我举着梯子穿过妈妈打麻将的南房，把梯子架在北墙上。铜丝缠在脖子上，针别在胸前，随着梯子的晃晃悠悠，我上到了房顶。多年后我看《树上的男爵》，就想起我当年也想过在房顶上生活一辈子。我第一次上到这么高的地方，整个小镇都很低。在房顶举目四眺，烟囱们喘着粗气，我第一次知道，住着我们人类，我们的房子太累了。只有严校长家的二层楼比较特别，从那里可以看到我的一举一动。我赶紧蹲了下来。我蹲在房顶拉了泡屎，想出了对策。五分钟后，一个小男孩披着一件灰色雨衣出现在了房顶，一叶障目的唯心主义能带来最大的安慰，本来如果事情就这样发展下去，也就没什么事情了，可惜的是，在小男孩将针插入天线的时候，由于动作幅度过大，雨衣掉了下来。小男孩暴露在了太阳下，就像一个侦察兵暴露在敌人的探照灯下。我连滚带爬地从房上下来，进到南房，刺耳的麻将声像一股热浪把我涌到街上，路边的老人在窃窃私语，爸爸喝酒回来了，他立下车子，我上去对他说，他们都在议论我。爸爸嗯了一声，到南房和妈妈吵架去了。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /><br />3</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">孙大海</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　孙大海死后，我开始从厂里偷砖，等偷够</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">28</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">块，我就能翻进孙大海家，拿回我的皮球，于是等我偷够</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">28</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">块，我就翻进了孙大海家，拿回了我的皮球。这只皮球后来被叫做了足球，在一次我蹲在</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">17</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">号公厕左数第三个坑沉思的时候，被某个人从</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">17</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">号公厕的南墙上拿到了我的世界以外的一个地方。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　上个世纪六十年代，中苏关系紧张，双方屯兵边境，为了保持平衡，毛主席下令在内蒙古巴巴什大沙漠修建一座导弹基地，我姥爷曾负责这座导弹基地一所厕所的建设。修建导弹基地的工程浩大而隐秘，人们受命从各地赶到西安报到时，还不知道召集他们是干什么，直到汽车拉人们到达一片戈壁，负责人才用一个小喇叭告诉大家，大家都知道，我国与苏联开战在即，我们是奉毛主席的命令，在巴巴什修建我国第一座核导弹基地，来与苏联抗衡。大家一听，欢呼雀跃，说，怎么不早说呢？早说我们不就有劲了吗？我姥爷是其中唯一一个郁闷的人。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　当时我姥爷的自创体系已经基本成型，用他给我姥姥话说就是，已经见底了。后来我见到姥爷的遗稿，看不懂，隐约感到姥爷是想从中学时期感受到的“场是人不可感知的存在”出发，来进行他对整个世界的怀疑。高中毕业后，我姥爷赋闲在家三年，正在姥爷不再打算赋闲，也就是认识了我未来的姥姥的时候，我姥爷的父亲一怒之下，把这个败家子送去了大西北当兵，发誓再也不要见到他。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　我姥爷在当兵第二个月被派到西安报到时，还不知道自己的任务是什么，领导只是说，到西安</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">XX</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">处领你的任务。到了</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">XX</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">处，也没人告诉姥爷他的任务，直到姥爷被拉到巴巴什，开始修厕所，他还是一片茫然。众所周知，初恋的人神志不清。我姥爷一路郁闷着，连要修导弹基地这件事都不知道。当然，这件事也只告诉了少数人，其他很多人直至干完他们的工作，都不知道他们的工作是用来干什么的。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　结果厕所还未修建完毕，中苏关系就已缓和，我姥爷望着北方，发出一声长叹。既然导弹基地不再被修建，修导弹基地的人也就不再是修导弹基地的人，谁也不知道他们是什么人，他们自己也不知道。修导弹基地剩下许多水泥，这些人用这些水泥在废弃的导弹基地上涂涂抹抹，就成了后来我出生的陕坝镇，由于完全用水泥建成，陕坝镇也被称作青镇。很久以后甚至多出了一个很荒唐的称法，那就是，塞外江南。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　我出生的时候，孙大海已经夺取了青镇一半以上垃圾堆的主权，正和镇北的小二哥进行谈判，双方争执不下的就是</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">17</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">号公厕前的垃圾堆。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">17</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">号公厕是青镇资格最老的公厕，是我姥爷修建的。双方最后也没达成一致，好比巴以和谈一样艰难，因为孙大海不会说话，也不会哑语。所以</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">17</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">号公厕的垃圾堆形势非常混乱，今天是孙大海的人抢到了，明天又是小二哥的人抢到了，如果两方同时到了，就会打起来。这也带动了</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">17</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">号公厕的不稳定，我初三的时候，</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">17</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">号公厕的南墙被一群孩子踢倒了。看着断壁残垣，我隐隐地感到了一个时代的结束。最终是街道办出面协调，商定隔天轮换作业，才把局势稳定了下来。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　谁都没有想到孙大海的垃圾生意会做到这么大，覆盖半个青镇。最初孙大海就是从捡了一只麻袋开始的。打小在我的印象里，孙大海就是一只麻袋。我上学的时候，孙大海就举着麻袋飘了出来，游荡在大街小巷，我放学的时候，孙大海就变成了一只气球，鼓鼓囊囊地回来了。几个月后孙大海就有了辆自行车。孙大海到底是不是哑巴，谁也不知道，总之我从未见过他说话。孙大海收破烂的方法就是站在人家门前敲门，呜呜地吼两声。我见过一次他收王阿姨家破烂的情景，那天我儿童节放假，正在和王阿姨的儿子在他家门外踢皮球。只见孙大海披着麻袋站在王阿姨家门前，敲了两声门，呜呜了两声，没有人出来，于是孙大海又呜呜了两声。然后，他就推开门进到了王阿姨家的院子里，举着麻袋就像摇旗呐喊那样又呜呜了起来，把王阿姨招了出来。王阿姨出来后噼里啪啦一顿臭骂，当时的我还听不懂臭骂的内容，只知道这内容吸引到院子里来一大群人，肯定不同凡响。我很饿了，就走了，他们怎么都不饿呢？</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">　　孙大海临死的时候，我才知道他还有儿女，儿女门都来要遗产来了。人们围在他的床前，孙大海大张着眼睛和嘴巴，啊啊了两声，大儿子递过来儿女们商量着写好的遗嘱，让他签字，他拿过笔，在纸上颤颤巍巍地写了几个字：话已经说完了。</span>

聂泽泽

附：这是《镇》的前半部分，是草稿，想把它再拉长一点，请教高手有无拉长的必要，如果有，该从什么角度以什么方式拉长

破冬角

<p>恩，虽然我自己说不出什么道理来，但像“<font face="宋体">比起浮华的《拳皇》来说，《铁拳》更需要的是一招一式的真才实学，也正因为如此，《铁拳》没有获得多少生存空间，渐渐淡出了历史舞台，现在只存在于</font><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-fareast-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa">S</span><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-size:12.0pt;mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;mso-ansi-language:en-us;mso-fareast-language:zh-cn;mso-bidi-language:ar-sa;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-family:'times new roman'">的光盘中”这样的句子，我觉得改改更好。</span>我不太确定是否该留住这样的句子，但这些句子要删掉是完全可以的。</p>

破冬角

另外，个人觉得，作品嘛......写完再发，才是一个好的心态。有段时间我写小说写得快，两三天发一篇小说，这些小说无一不是糟糕头顶的玩意。古人说：欲速则不达。一个以前我很喜欢的网络作家九把刀，他的座右铭是：慢慢来，比较快。渴求进步是好事，提高写作水平也的确是靠多练。但这里的“练”绝不是说在这个过程中我们对待写作的态度就能比平常松懈哪怕只有半点。“练”的概念是从结果来看的。什么是结果？你的小说水平到了一定高度，这是结果。那么在过程中的每一次进步，其实也可以说是结果。为什么这么说呢？我不知道你怎么看，对我来说，结果这个词显得有些小心翼翼。那么写作中不也是如此吗？要得到提高，我们只能离开熟悉的环境，于是写作变成了探索。在黑暗中我们像盲人那样握紧笔帽（或许不是笔帽而是笔记本？），手臂拼了命的伸直，钢笔顶端的笔尖就是我们探路的拐杖。写作中或许我们会一次次折返，也可能在无意识间迅速贴近又远离那些更加深邃的领域。无论结果如何——不管这篇小说对读者来说是好是坏，它绝对在很大程度上提高了作者对小说的认识和理解。这些理解我们很可能看得很多，但只有真正接触过，你才会清楚这到底是怎么一回事。因此，渴望获得提高之前，作者应该明白这不是一件容易做到的事情。因此，你不能只渴望结果，对待过程你却想一笔带过。耐心，这是展开探索的前提。那么就这点来看，你可能也有点“急于提高”的心态在，是不是？

破冬角

<p>恩，再举个例子。比如这句：“<font face="宋体">一拳打出去就能废对方多半管血，这超重拳无法阻挡”</font></p><p><font face="宋体">你觉得，它是不是显得很别扭呢？前半句口语化的感觉在后半句居然就发生了改变，“无法”，“阻挡”两个词语以及“这”都显得有些过了。或者说后半句是很没必要的。不仅没必要，它还给小说添了污点。</font></p><p><font face="宋体">一些浅见。</font></p>

聂泽泽

有人告诉我，只有当你开始注意怎么写而不是写什么的时候，真正的写作才可以开始，这话我现在都不明白。我确实太浮躁了，却又没有哲学上的支撑来让我耐得住寂寞，今年以后我会一年只出产一个成品，其他时间就单练吧。如果写不深，最好别动笔，这是句好话

白垩

建议读一下《给青年小说家的十封信》。略萨写的

lostboy

<p>写得挺好的。每一段都可以说是个大纲。中篇的话需要很高超的技巧。可以先写成长篇，再加以提炼。</p>