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<p>是早一阵写的东西，最近老想写开心的故事，可发现自己很无力。所以贴个以前的，算是打个招呼，也希望前辈给点建议，指点一下，谢谢`~~</p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">这是一座小楼</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">二层高</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">白色的皮肤</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">四周用木制栅栏围着</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">屋子里的炉火的低低的燃烧</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">淡淡的颜色映照着四周</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">穿蓝色衣裙的女子</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">坐在一张摇椅上</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">手里打着毛衣</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">一件已经完成了一半的墨蓝的毛衣</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">上面打的是八字的花纹</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">突然打了一个冷颤</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">抬头望了窗外才知夕阳已经落到了低处</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">墙上的时钟指向了六点</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman" size="3">&nbsp;</font></span></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">冬天的黑夜</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">来的比较早</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">男子</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">看看手上的腕表</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,5</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">点半</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">刚刚下班的时间</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">今天是他和她的结婚纪念日</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">婚前的时候</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">总是想给她一个温暖的地方</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">打拼了这许多年</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">总算是有了着落</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">才搬到新的小楼</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">生活慢慢的步上正轨</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">男子赶到花店里</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">买了鲜红的玫瑰</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">热烈的开放着的玫瑰希望可以表达自己现在的心情</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">回想以前的日子</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">两个人开始的时候</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">经常的时间都是租房子住的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">三家不同的来历的人</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">住在同一个屋檐下</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">总是有许多不便的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">每天省吃俭用的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">攒下了这一笔头款</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">这样才搬到这所小楼</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">地方僻静了点</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">可是</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">宁静的时候</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">总是两个人</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">温暖的感觉对方存在着</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">家</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">还是自己的好</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman" size="3">&nbsp;</font></span></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">女子</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">到了厨房</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">在一阵的锅碗瓢盆的交响曲后</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">做了四菜一汤</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">因为最近看了些关于营养学的书籍</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">所以</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">配出来的菜色也比较多彩了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">营养也慢慢的配的平衡了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">女子想</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">: </font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">虽然是结婚纪念</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">可是还是不能太浪费了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">这四菜一汤大概都吃不完的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">剩下的时间就是慢慢的等待了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">男子回来的时候</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">两个人就可以开心的吃一顿晚餐了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">到了客厅里</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">继续打着毛线</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">一只白色的小猫走过来</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">慢吞吞的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">卧在她的脚边</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">抬起头</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">摩嗦着她的腿</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">一边还喵喵的叫着</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,”</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">猫猫</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">你饿了么</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">?”</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">看看时间</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">已经</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">7</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">点了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">家里公司太远了也是没办法的事情</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">毕竟自己还是喜欢宁静的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,”</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">等等</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">我给你拿牛奶来</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">”,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">猫</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">仿佛听懂了般</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">静静的走到自己的饭盒的前面</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">等待女子给它以食物</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman" size="3">&nbsp;</font></span></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">路上滴滴答答的下起了小雨</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">不知道会不会变大雨</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">男子想</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">也许应该打车回家而不等公车了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">想着的时候</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">手已经抬起来了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">一辆绿色的出租车</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">停在眼前</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.”</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">到</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">***</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">的小白楼</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">”,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">司机听了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">便直直的开了车子</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">雨慢慢的大了起来</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">由于他的地址在一个比较偏僻的角落</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">路上的车辆也比较少</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">只是偶尔会有几个地方转弯很急</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">司机看到路上也没什么人</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">便加了速</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">雨夜里的车</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">大多都是赶时间的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">而且也不会想到是否会有那么巧合的事情发生</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">在到男子家前的最后一个拐弯的地方</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">车子与车子相遇了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">公车和出租的车子</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">碰撞到了一起</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">逃出了车子的乘客打了急救的电话</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">在医院赶来的时候</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">女子也走出了家门</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman" size="3">&nbsp;</font></span></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">时间上</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">总是过得很慢</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">尤其是在等待的时候</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">外面下起了雨</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">女子想起来</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">男子出门的时候并没有带了雨伞</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">所以</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">拿了雨伞出门</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">急急的往车站的方向走去</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">大约过了十几分钟的样子</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">走到了拐弯的地方</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">看到了车祸</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">问了他人说是公交车撞车了</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">心就提到了嗓子眼</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">七上八下的</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">奔到了出事的地方</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">看到男子被抬上了救护车</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">手里还拿着一束玫瑰花的花梗</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">女子冲开了人群</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">到了救护车上</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,”</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">他是我的丈夫</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">让我上车吧</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">”.</font></span></font></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">到了医院</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">女子在走廊上面徘徊着</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">时不时的看看手术室</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">灯依旧亮着</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">进进出出的护士医生都说在尽力抢救</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">而自己只能等待</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p><p><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman" size="3">&nbsp;</font></span></p><p><font size="3"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">男子觉得头痛的很</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">睁开眼睛</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">看到一群白色衣服的人</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">在灯光的下面</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">忽然想起</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">妻子还在家中等待着</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">就出了手术室</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">看到女子在外面</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">满脸的泪水</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">眼中的茫然让自己心痛</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">无助的望着来往的人</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">男子伸出手</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">想抚摸女子的头</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">再抱过来到自己的胸口</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">可是</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">他却发现自己没有接触的感觉</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">,</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">空空的滑过了她的身体</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="Times New Roman">.</font></span></font></p>[em04]

子宁

<p>这么难评价还是懒得给评价？</p>[em06]

鳜膛弃

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>子宁</i>在2007-1-9 15:07:35的发言：</b><br/><p>是早一阵写的东西，最近老想写开心的故事，可发现自己很无力。所以贴个以前的，算是打个招呼，也希望前辈给点建议，指点一下，谢谢`~~</p></div><p>以后不用打招呼撒</p><p>这个文章很差啊，所以不评论也不是什么坏事情，如果你现在进步了，就贴现在写的嘛，不要贴以前的。</p>

子宁

知道了,谢谢提醒[em04]