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<p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;text-align:center;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">后视镜 <p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">有两三滴飘落在指尖上,结成一枚不起眼的透明宝石。雨滴越来越多,在几个故作悠闲的呼吸间,已经汇成一道细流,沿拇指向下滑动,凝聚在手心里,在阳光的照射下隐隐闪光。他似乎连反应都要比别人慢几拍,等手中的雨水汇聚成流,沿经臂膀的曲线渗入衣服的时候,仿佛才打了个激灵,身子向后一缩,躲进安静的阴影里。 </span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">雨的来势猝不及防,不一会就变成了滔天大雨。暴雨声势浩大,细密的雨落在地上,像是密密麻麻的蚯蚓在地里欢呼雀跃。人们站在屋檐底下发呆,不知把目光放向何处。他抹开脸上的水珠,又在头发上捋了捋。</span></span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">手机就是这时响起来的。在头发上不甘心地挠了几下,就把湿漉漉的手塞进裤兜,滑开键盘后他安静地等待了一段时间,在闭上眼后——大约过了一秒钟,他睁眼的同时——手指按下绿键。</span> <p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“喂?下雨了啊,雨好大。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“是啊,我都被淋湿了。”</span></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“喂?下雨了啊,雨好大。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“是啊,我都被淋湿了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“你在哪?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“我在</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">JH广场。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“你在JH广场啊。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“是啊,那还去不去啊?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“我在八仙饭馆吃饭。”</span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“还去吗?”他揉了揉眼睛,沉默见机涌入电话两头的中间,制造了十多秒钟短但让人难受的空白。这段时间里他开始转圈,走进超市又从另一个出口穿出来,直到电话那头说:“对了,我妈也和我在一块。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“咦?你妈</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“和我在一起。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">他皱起了眉头,手在干燥粗糙的脸上来回搓了几下,一些白色的细碎物从皮肤上剥落,粘在手指上。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“今天让你请客真是不好意思啊哈哈。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“我请客?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“是啊,一会再给你打过来。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“哦,哦</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">…</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">好。”电话那边传来空荡单调的盲音。他咬着下唇内部的一小块肉,上下齿挤压着红嫩的唇肉。他知道小凡的妈妈在几年前就出车祸死了。刚才她却说自己和她在一块吃饭,这是怎么啦?想了一会,他觉得这有些不对劲,但不值得想这么多,再说,雨下得这么大——</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman'">一阵刺耳的乐音响起——</span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">如同众目睽睽之下被施法变成一只蛙人,唏哩哗啦地落入水中,浑圆青白的屁股就像吐出的红舌头,暴露而直接地,令他品尝到仿佛初次被愚弄时的羞涩与恼怒。时间变得缓慢,他甚至可以在空中翻转身体,用悲伤的眼神望一眼岸上的人,才决绝地坠入水中。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">从水里跃出来的姿势,远没有人们想得那么矫健和魁梧:静静地埋藏在温暖腥鲜的水域里,等待某个时机——或许等光线咔嗒一声向下滑落——双脚狠狠地踩几下,身子就笔直地向外射出去:这些统统没有。出水的状态,更像一头阉公牛,在快乐地撒野了一番后,从泥潭里走出来时的神态。刚才涌现出的精力和脾气泄掉了,它回归沉默小心的性格。公牛朝牧人走去,像交待错误的孩子。它谦卑地望着牧人,大眼珠反射空洞地,牛奶般的光。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">他按下了闹钟,清晨安静下来,如同扬起的灰尘失去风向上的力量而缓缓落下一样,一切很快就恢复往常了。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">起床以后,他看了看表,低声骂了句什么,打了个哈欠。随后他开始在卧室里踱步,进行了数次不为人知的较量:他几乎试过所有方法来转移注意力,包括仔细查看钢笔上的镀金签名,站在书柜前仔细打量一个个仿佛从未见过的书名,强迫自己想象毫无关联的事情:在另一个世界,他是尤尔达米斯的英雄,张狂的火焰般的红色长发披肩,双手各握一把大剑,由传奇工匠打造,锋利无边:赫赫有名的</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-font-kerning:0pt"><font face="Times New Roman">“</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">屠龙者双牙</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-font-kerning:0pt"><font face="Times New Roman">”</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">。他还有红如发色的瞳孔。夜里他就像一头绷驰着的野兽,伏在马背上,部队已经偷偷包围敌方住所,只要一声令下,就能把猝不及防的敌人全数绞杀。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">打开窗玻璃和随时都像被油浸过的纱窗,清凉的风吹了进来。透过窗户,他看到乌云把天空一点点蚕食,以老鼠的细心进行缓慢但有效的攻势。在一段时间里,乌云的行动将近停滞,突击部队与敌人发生碰撞,厮杀,搅成一团灰白色,后方绵绵不绝的大军裹上将士的鲜血前进,迟早攻下天空的每一道防线。他在窗前左顾右盼,企图从这幅不断缓慢变化的景象里找到一些启示。雨有多大。多久下。多少灰尘废气与积云融为一体。多少人会感到厌烦或喜悦。多少晾在阳台没来得及收的物什被打湿。多少事物迎接洗刷。他没能参悟出什么。唯一可知的仅仅是,不久之后雨水将在,城市的天空降落。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“还真的要下雨。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">他继续停留了一会,很快对此感到厌烦。他把窗帘拉上,打算离开卧室,却忽然</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-font-kerning:0pt"><font face="Times New Roman">——</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">拖鞋根部在光滑的木地板上蹭了一段距离</span><span lang="EN-US" style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-font-kerning:0pt"><font face="Times New Roman">——</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">停了下来。他环视光线薄弱的房间,就像发现新事物一样充满好奇。双手叉腰,眼神带领脖子左右晃动,像前来租房的大学生,打算淡定地询问房东:这房子,啊......这房子多少钱一个月?一边询问仰起头观察屋顶上每一根构筑,试图找到蛛丝马迹的缺陷。尽管内心已开始为在建筑学上无知而感到茫然和不安,眼神仍古灵精怪地左窜右跳,不肯落下。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">离开卧室,他感到客厅有些冰冷。除去用于摆放电视机及DVD的桌子,一对音响,茶几和沙发,剩余的地面并不宽敞。他租不起多大的房子。于是更多时候,客厅像是熟悉可靠的小径,可以前进和停留,必要时还能容许两个人擦肩而过,但这没能给他带来更多的亲切感。仿佛他面对的不是房子,而是</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">一个对任何事物都不抱期待的女人或猫。三扇窗子都敞开着,没有风。但涌来一股不太明显,却能感知的冷。他坐在沙发上,拿起遥控器:沙发和遥控器也是冷冰冰的。压在沙发上的屁股陷了进去,但是点到为止。没有像流沙那样一往无回。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">点燃一根烟。每当把烟拔出,翻开嘴皮吐出一坨坨厚重的眼圈的时候,他就竖起大拇指抠鼻子,毫不在意大拇指的诸多不便。电视正在播放新闻,中国人又创了一个吉尼斯纪录</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">手机振动了起来,他把手机握在手心里,静心等待了一会,手机还在不厌其烦地响着。他这才磨磨蹭蹭地打开手机盖。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“喂,小罗啊</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“喂?我听不清楚。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“喂,喂</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“喂?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“喂,听得到吗?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“哦,现在好了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“小罗啊,出来吧。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“哪?”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“出来玩啊。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“干嘛?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“没干嘛啊,就是想找你出来玩玩嘛。没干嘛就不能来找你啊?好好的一个周末,窝在家里干什么啊。咱们好久没聚啦。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“你们怎么不事先通知我啊。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“快点下来吧,我们在等你。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“去哪玩?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“先去飞象唱歌,然后去吃饭。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“你们又要去唱歌啊?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“出来聚聚嘛。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">怎么不事先先通知我呢?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“哎呀,快点下来吧你。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“你们有多少人了?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“猪皮,李真,箩筐和我。小凡说她已经出门了,还有几个可能也要来。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“这么多人啊</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">干脆我不去了吧?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“怎么了?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“不是</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">我不习惯这么多人。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“来吧。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“我真的不想去。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“唉!你真打算这么扫大家兴?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“不是的</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“那就快来!”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“好吧,我去换衣服。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“动作搞快点啊。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“对了,八仙饭馆在哪?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“八仙饭馆?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“对啊。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“你从哪听来的?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“一个朋友那。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“我没听说过,但又好像有些熟悉</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“我也是这么觉得。你真的不知道?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">不知道。确实不知道哪里有这个饭馆。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“哦。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“问这个干嘛?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“没干嘛,就问问。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“你家离JH广场近,待会可别让我们等你一个。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“好好,我知道了,我现在就出门。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">离开家的时候,手表显示已经下午一点了。空气很闷热,但并没有多少阳光。连接电线杆的电线分割了本就狭小的天空——四周都是居民楼,统一呈灰色调,排列整齐,越往远处看,楼房遮盖天空的部分就越少。如同从远处裂开一道口子,灰暗浑浊的泥流缓缓滚入裂口之中,直到失去了推进的力量,才以不易察觉的声势逐渐凝固。而阳光就像捣碎的蛋黄,残缺的光线若隐若现地照射在他身上,并且亮度还在持续减少着。</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">连声音都像是罩上一层玻璃,变得暧昧和含糊。他好不容易才听见手机的铃声。</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“喂?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“你出来了没啊?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“出来了,在路上。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“哦,我们已经在车上了。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“恩。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“对了,我想起来了。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“什么东西?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“八仙饭店。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“啊?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“我说我想起八仙饭店了。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“在哪?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“不在哪。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“啊?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“八仙饭店,是我们小时候给那片工地取的名字啊。以前我们在那里玩家家酒,你记不得了?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“家家酒?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“唉,你忘啦。我是店长,你是厨子一号,张海霖是厨子二号,还有客人,店长,大官</span><span style="mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;mso-ascii-font-family:宋体"><font face="Times New Roman">……</font></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“好像真有这么回事。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“是啊。不过现在空地已经废弃了。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“哦,哦对。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“不过你朋友说的那个八仙饭馆应该是才开的吧?”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“啊?哦,是啊。应该是。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“恩,那一会我们到了再联系你。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">“好,好。”</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">他的身体埋进居民楼的阴影里。即使如此,也无法避免他的脸上凝结出一颗颗细小的汗珠。</span> </p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"></span><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">天气又闷又热,阳光却越来越淡。手机铃声沉浸于并不存在的白噪音中,像对一切厌烦透了的女人那样,在口袋里抖动起来。 </span></p>
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<p>自我评价:堆砌大于描写,刻意大于自然,幼稚,不讨好,混乱,不耐心,过于简单。整体由于过于重视“单句”或“单段”的精巧而支离破碎,做作,七拼八凑,不知所谓。</p><p>...或许只能期望回归学校生活可以吸取到充足的养分。</p>
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<p>个人觉得,描写挺专注的诶。。</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0pt;text-indent:21pt;mso-char-indent-count:2.0"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">他皱起了眉头,手在干燥粗糙的脸上来回抠了几下,一些白色的细碎物从皮肤上剥落,粘在手指上。 <p></p></span></p><p></p><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman';mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn">这句,如果是“抠”,碎屑会应该会粘到指甲上吧。。如果是用指甲,我理解的“抠”是表示比较费力,或者是比较失神,因为通常用指甲都是“挠”啊“刮”啊。。或者就是粘到手指上,这时候应该是,“搓”?</span></span>
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<p>恩,已经改正..</p><p>当初用抠,只要是想表现出皮肤粗糙的感觉..</p>
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气氛的不断浓郁令结尾的不动声色也变得有力量。总体叙述的语感不错。
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<p>小破你更需要在现实中生活一番。</p><p>这个我没读。</p>
我的基本工作是:上笼屉、铺麴、点火、取浆、入缸,最后起糟。
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发表于 2008-9-1 13:39:54 |只看该作者
有些句子还是有亮色的。不够其他地方上升的空间还很高,很不平衡。
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发表于 2008-9-2 15:23:23 |只看该作者
很轻盈,对话还是有种书面感。前面的描写和后面的一比,明显头重脚轻啊。
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