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<span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\';"><span><span><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span><strong>睡岸上的芙蓉<p></p></strong></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman"><strong>&nbsp;</strong></font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">听我说,费尔南多,那一天</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">头脑在游荡,像一只飞蛾游荡在</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">大沙地之外的,群花中;</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">而且,无论波浪的动荡,在海草上</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">在斑驳披覆的礁石上,发出什么声响,</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">都没有烦扰,最悠闲的耳朵。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">然后,那只巨怪附体般的飞蛾,</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">起飞了,它曾敛翅倒卧,背对慵倦的大海</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">粼粼的蓝光和众彩缠身的紫,挡开</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">海水细碎的神侃,昏睡在</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">海岸嶙峋的瘦骨上,在水光点颤中</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">它起飞,追寻耀燃的红</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">澄黄的花粉迸溅一身——红</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">红得就像老咖啡店飘飞的旗——</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">在那惊晕的下午,一直在那里游荡。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">听我说,史蒂文斯,你的缪斯在一个晕涨的午后游荡。你曾在一家海边的老咖啡馆遇到过费尔南多,没人知道他是谁。但我们知道,在你的头脑里,斯宾塞文雅的辞彩幻化出“水光点颤”(</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">besprent</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">,原意是“洒满的”),而千层碧波的混响不过是通俗的海聊神侃(</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">blather</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">),质地殊异的用词环绕着一个沉浸于创造的头脑。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">你和费尔南多都记得那飘飞的红旗,也记得那些无意义的海潮声,但他并不知道,你的创造力已经变形成一只巨怪般的飞蛾。它庞大,自我专注,对人没有威胁,笼罩着它栖身的时空,似乎肩负着某种神秘的使命。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">费尔南多,请听史蒂文斯描述头脑:它像一只飞蛾,于是变成了飞蛾,头脑用一个比喻无声无息地消弭了边界。同时,外界的声色都暂时被忘却,而悠闲和慵倦,都是头脑浑然一体、敏感到发晕的状态。飞蛾并不是花间的蝴蝶,它本身质木无文,但却感知到了更强烈的刺激,扑向芙蓉花的时候,它进入了纯色彩。我们发现,也许并没有芙蓉花,就像诗里的飞蛾来原本是来自一个明喻,而芙蓉花也许是虚实相生中的一个隐喻,也许诗人是在描绘海滨的落日,迸溅耀燃的色彩,与飘飞的思绪共在共发。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">在这首诗的背后,“飞蛾扑火”和“飞蛾授粉”这两个自然现象被联系起来。这里的“芙蓉”是木槿属的植物,花开盛艳,在夏日午后阳光的照射下确如火焰浮动。在史蒂文斯居住的康州,它被当作家养花卉,而在佛罗里达,它融入了的野生风景。在原诗里,澄黄的花粉在语法上既属于“耀燃的红”,又可修饰飞蛾,而“水光点颤”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">(besprent) </font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">和“迸溅”(</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">dabbled</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">)相应生辉,呈现飞蛾与环境的互动。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">等飞蛾游荡到诗的最后一行,史蒂文斯才点明这首诗的气氛:惊晕(</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">stupid</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">)。他是在拉丁语源的意义上使用这个词——</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">stupidus</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">来自</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">stupere</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">,包含眩晕和惊讶两种意义,这正是头脑在“巨怪附体”时的感觉。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman">&nbsp;</font></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><font face="Times New Roman">1921</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">年,现代主义已经到了高峰期,那是《尤利西斯》和《荒原》的时代。史蒂文斯却仍在写这种诗,这里没有对宏大的神话的改造,也没有彰显某种文学企图。他的飞蛾为何游荡,诗中没有答案。只需要一个虚拟的听众,这首诗泼洒印象,重构回忆,制造了一个短暂的,难以赋予明确意义和价值的神物——它不需要被拯救,它拥有自己的世界。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"></span><p></p><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"></span></p></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"></span><p></p></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"></span>
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<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'mso-hansi-font-family:\';"></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'mso-hansi-font-family:\';"></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'mso-hansi-font-family:\';">这首诗实在是太好了。决非那种似是而非的“好诗”。</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'mso-hansi-font-family:\';">碧蓝和众彩缠身的紫——赞一个!</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'mso-hansi-font-family:\';">在以前我曾经提到过seapurple这个词,这首诗让我明白了它。</span></p>
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<p>译得真好。把那两段从三行改成四行时,有什么特别的考虑?</p><p>查来一个70年前的评论。</p><div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New Roman\';"><p>August 9, 1931, NYTimes</p><p>ure Poetry and Mr. Wallace Stevens</p><p>By PERCY HUTCHISON</p>More than one critic, and not a few poets, have toyed with the idea of what has been termed :pure poetry," which is to say, a poetry which should depend for its effectiveness on its rhythms and the tonal values of the words employed with as complete a dissociation from ideational content as may be humanly possible. Those who have argued for such "pure poetry" have frequently, if not always, been obsessed with some hazy notion of an analogy between music and poetry. As a shining example of this school take Sidney Lanier, who was a skilled musician as well as a notable poet. Lanier advanced the theory that every vowel has its color value. This was not an association of ideas; the letter "e" was not red because it is in the word red, or green because it is in the word green, but the hearer, experiencing the word should, on Lanier\'s theory, experience, simultaneously with the sound, a distinct sensation of color. In the second decade of this century--the movement began in the first decade--numerous poetic schools drove theory hard. Perhaps none strove especially to carry out Lanier\'s color hypothesis, but there were the Imagists, and there was Vorticism and Cubism, and many more "isms" besides. For the most part, these schools have died the death which could have been prophesied for them. Poetry is founded in ideas; to be effective and lasting, poetry must be based on life, it must touch and vitalize emotion. For proof, one has but to turn to the poetry that has endured. In poetry, doctrinaire composition has no permanent place. <p></p><p>Hence, unpleasant as it is to record such a conclusion, the very remarkable work of Wallace Stevens cannot endure. The verses which go to make up the volume "Harmonium" are as close to "pure poetry" as one could expect to come. And so far as rhythms and vowels and consonants may be substituted for musical notes, the volume is an achievement. But the achievement is not poetry, it is a tour de force, a "stunt" in the fantastic and the bizarre. <strong>From one end of the book to the other there is not an idea that can vitally affect the mind, there is not a word that can arouse emotion. The volume is a glittering edifice of icicles.</strong> Brilliant as the moon, the book is equally dead. Only when Stevens goes over to the Chinese does he score, and then not completely, for with all the virtuosity that his verse displays he fails quite to attain the lacquer finish of his Oriental masters. The following, <strong>"Hibiscus on the Sleeping Shores," is the piece that comes nearest to the Chinese, and this is marred by the intrusion in the last line of the critical adjective "stupid."</strong><br/>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</p><ul><p></p><p>I say now, Fernando, that on that day<br/>The mind roamed as a moth roams,<br/>Among the blooms beyond the open sand;<br/>And that whatever noise the motion of the waves<br/>Made on the sea-weeds and the covered stones<br/>Disturbed not even the most idle ear<br/>Then it was that the monstered moth<br/>Which had lain folded against the blue<br/>And the colored purple of the lazy sea,<br/>And which had drowsed along the bony shores,<br/>Shut to the blather that the water made,<br/>Rose up besprent and sought the flaming red<br/>Dabbled with yellow pollen-red as red<br/>As the flag above the old cafe--<br/>And roamed there all the stupid afternoon.</p></ul><p></p><p>For the full tonal and rhythmic effect of this it must be read aloud, chanted, as Tennyson and Swinburne chanted their verses. Then, within its limits, its very narrow limits, "Hibiscus" will be found to be a musical attainment not before guessed at. But it is not poetry in the larger meaning of the term. And it is not actually music that one has here, but an imitation of music. And if there is a mood conveyed, the mood could have been equally as well conveyed by other lines equally languid of rhythm. No doubt the theorists in poetry have enriched their craft, but at a disservice to themselves. Wallace Stevens is a martyr to a lost cause.</p></span></div>
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我是嫌第二节译文字太多了,所以匀出一行,当然为求行数一致,也可以收进去。
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<span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">而且,无论波浪的动荡,在海草</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">在海草披覆的礁石上,制造了什么声音,</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">都没有烦扰,悠闲到极点的耳朵。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p><font face="Times New Roman"></font></p></span></p><p><font face="Times New Roman"></font></p><p></p><p><font face="Times New Roman"></font></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">然后,那只巨怪附体般的飞蛾</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">起飞了,它曾敛翅倒卧,背对慵倦的大海</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">泛起的碧蓝和众彩缠身的紫,挡开</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"></span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt;"><p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;">这样也行,不过在译文中显得有点拥挤,节奏感也略逊。</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;">你觉得呢? 另外,这篇评论是从哪里找到的,我也想去看一下。</p></span>
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<p>你搜的这篇评论很有意思,当年他却是很受误解。</p><p>Stupid,这个词评论者读错的,这里没有一般的“愚蠢的”这个负面意思,而是昏昏然的意思。</p>
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<p>倒卧就是偃,古代评论中很重要的一个字</p><p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><b><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt">睡岸上的芙蓉&nbsp; (另一个译本) </span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:9pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:9pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt">&nbsp;<p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">听我说,费尔南多,那一天</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">心在游荡,像只飞蛾翩翩飞舞</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">在花间,在空旷的沙滩之外。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><br /></span><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">任由海波动荡,拍打</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">海草与礁石,造出任何声响</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">都搅扰不到那只最悠闲的耳朵。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><br /><br /></span><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">着了魔的飞蛾,</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">一度敛翅倚着湛蓝</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">与慵慵之海的荧紫,</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span lang="EN-US" 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roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">闭耳不闻水的海侃,此时它</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">盈盈飞起,去寻那片火红</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><br /><br /></span><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">溅洒着灿黄的花粉——红红的</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-hansi-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new roman&amp:;quot:;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt">就像那间老咖啡屋上的幡旗——</span><span lang="EN-US" style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-bidi-font-size:10.5pt"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt;word-break:break-all;text-align:left;mso-pagination:widow-orphan"><span style="font-size:10pt;font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:&amp;quot:;times new 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