《戏曲之欢》

拔拔草

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二十月

不错。<p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">居家有礼，还是北上欢愉</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'"></span></p><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'"><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin:0cm 0cm 0pt"><span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">居家有礼，还是北上有欢，我要写的话就是这样啦。嘿嘿</span></p></span>

拔拔草

谢二十月读。这首写得还不够烈。

目目连

很丰富，喜欢，哦耶。

井井回

<p><br />很熟悉的节奏。。喜欢前3节，写得自由、开放，弹性也十足。</p><p>“烦请愧悔交加、马失前蹄”这句有点弱。和结尾一样，与字词之间的距离太近了，显得沉重、束缚、用强，没有跳起来。好象完全低头再写。像飞行得不错的飞机，落地时轮胎有点硬。</p>

张研

牛！结尾好，“白犀牛”我也爱干这种事，呵呵

拔拔草

井回看出问题来了，实际上原本是在以<span style="font-family:宋体;mso-ascii-font-family:'times new roman';mso-hansi-font-family:'times new roman'">烦请愧悔交加、马失前蹄为结尾的，当时觉得这句不够，有些点到为止，尽管它已经发出结束这首诗的喟叹了。因此最末一段是后来加上去的。</span>

井井回

加这一节效果挺好。“这样”的诗歌，结尾时挺要状态的。。<br />

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夏花

终于看到这个人也喜欢的诗了，原来他除了喜欢自己的诗外还喜欢其它的诗，不过是也是圈中人。

隐忍

舒服流畅．